i need feedback please!!!

so i was writing this in my cultures class. there is now way i actually get work done when on a computer, but then i cant get any work done without a distraction or two. but anyways could you tell me what you think of this?

Once upon a time people stopped using that as an opening for stories. Now the time I was specifically talking about was once upon a time, but it was not so long ago that the people involved were no longer with us. In fact one of them was the same exact age, two of them had grown up and gotten married to each other, because the way the two had bickered said that they had hated each other’s guts and would never think to marry one another, another of the group went on to start a new supermarket that may or may not top Wal-Mart, and some of the others were doing various jobs that pale to everything else, like hobos and cashiers, though some might disagree and say that being a hobo is full of excitement and being a cashier is very dangerous, these people, however, need to watch a good movie with bombs and such to see what real excitement is, and also figure what a real pay is.

Now to go back to where it all began, because writers do not have to throw a reader in the middle or end of a story to get them interested when it only confuses people. You can still read a story from the beginning and stop at the end and still be satisfied about the story itself. Why bother with all the new confusing literature methods when the old one works just as fine? Like my old teacher once said, ‘why re-invent the wheel?’. Now being as lazy as I am and not wanting to confuse the reader or myself, I’ve decided to start at the very beginning. Though not the beginning of the whole entire thing, but close enough, because this story is only allowed to cut down so many trees and writing the creation of man sounds more difficult than patting your head and rubbing your stomach at the same time.

Getting back to the story I must say one thing before I begin, the beginning of this story may sound confusing. There were two beginnings to begin with. One being from the point the guy who had started the whole event started it and another start from when the people who had just got helplessly involved and dragged into the whole situation started being involved. So I chose the second one, because their beginning and end is much more exciting than the other guys. Plus my editor said I had to at least start with some hook.

Now to really get back to the story.


and thats all i got.

dot dot dot and another dot for the fun of it

today they canceled archery T.T

instead of shooting arrows we walked the track, round and round (lets forget the fact that its more curve line curve line)
though we are going to have archery club next year XP

ummm.....

ive got two projects that i should be working on this weekend. one about basque, a ethnic group in spain and france. and the other one is a group project and we're making a news report based in ww2.

i might be going to see nation treasure 2 this weekend with just a group of ppl.

i actually finished my english book on time, its refreshingly straight forward.

if two plus two equals fish, then what does ten times ten equal?

blah blah blah

ughs..... i need to go to the doctor, i somehow hurt my should like last monday...



i really just cant stay uninjured, its sad. half the time (okay maybe less) i'm out of pe for one injury or another. its very sad.



ummmmm, thriving ivroy's self titled cd is awesoem, though i dont remember if ive said that already.



we watched a movie about cavemen in science, and the class before told us we were watching a porno or something so the whole class was attaching the teaher about it. but it really was just naked cavemen..... it was odd, but the way some ppl can be so immature is funny, i just spent the whole time editing one of my stories

mәntal vs [H]ouse md really no competition

so i watched mental last night, i tried to make the title look like the thing but couldn't find a backwards e unless it was upside down too.

so anyways the show was basically a rip off of house, which is very irksome and what not cause they ripped it off all wrong, but i guess otherwise it would be plagiarism or what not, and apparently thats bad.

but the main differences are that the guys a therapist not a doctor, he doesn't have a wilson (though does have a stacey and cuddy, plus a chase and camren), and he cares about the patients......

its so off but i need my fix till season six starts.

but besides my show fetish, ive been practicing archery at school, hopefully will have a club next year. i'm not that bad if i do say so myself, but still no bulls eye T.T i got this ' ' close once.

i recommend everyone should read good omens by neil gaimen and terry prattchet (dont know if i spelt their names right) its this book about armaragond/end of the world. but its hilarious anyways. my favs crowely with his bently, tho azirphale has the book shop

my panish teacher was talking about taken, and if you havent seen the movie i'm not going to ruin the plot all im going to say is that he said(no thats not confusing) 'that it could happen to any one of you' and pointed straight at me O.o i dont wanna be kidnapped in a foriegn coutry!!!

in the pond is a good bok too, the first english book i've actually read in a long long time. its kinda sad really.

hmmm life is a bit boring when it somes to a point when your trying to think of things to say....