i need feedback please!!!

so i was writing this in my cultures class. there is now way i actually get work done when on a computer, but then i cant get any work done without a distraction or two. but anyways could you tell me what you think of this?

Once upon a time people stopped using that as an opening for stories. Now the time I was specifically talking about was once upon a time, but it was not so long ago that the people involved were no longer with us. In fact one of them was the same exact age, two of them had grown up and gotten married to each other, because the way the two had bickered said that they had hated each other’s guts and would never think to marry one another, another of the group went on to start a new supermarket that may or may not top Wal-Mart, and some of the others were doing various jobs that pale to everything else, like hobos and cashiers, though some might disagree and say that being a hobo is full of excitement and being a cashier is very dangerous, these people, however, need to watch a good movie with bombs and such to see what real excitement is, and also figure what a real pay is.

Now to go back to where it all began, because writers do not have to throw a reader in the middle or end of a story to get them interested when it only confuses people. You can still read a story from the beginning and stop at the end and still be satisfied about the story itself. Why bother with all the new confusing literature methods when the old one works just as fine? Like my old teacher once said, ‘why re-invent the wheel?’. Now being as lazy as I am and not wanting to confuse the reader or myself, I’ve decided to start at the very beginning. Though not the beginning of the whole entire thing, but close enough, because this story is only allowed to cut down so many trees and writing the creation of man sounds more difficult than patting your head and rubbing your stomach at the same time.

Getting back to the story I must say one thing before I begin, the beginning of this story may sound confusing. There were two beginnings to begin with. One being from the point the guy who had started the whole event started it and another start from when the people who had just got helplessly involved and dragged into the whole situation started being involved. So I chose the second one, because their beginning and end is much more exciting than the other guys. Plus my editor said I had to at least start with some hook.

Now to really get back to the story.


and thats all i got.